003.[Dream]

2010-05-04 · 첨삭 강사 Shy

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[Dream] I wanted to be a Architecture when I was child. because, I thought to build huge building which like a Empire State would be wonderful job. So, I prepared to mathematics. but, I realized that I don't have talent about math for that reason, I changed my dream when I was teenager. nowaday my dream is be a good leader at small team in global business group.

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Hi [이름]!   I didn't know you wanted to be an architect. I wanted to be an Architect too! But my mom didn't allow me to. I love drawing that is why. Oh well, dreams are meant to be changed sometimes. Good luck in beco[이름]g a good leader [이름]! I know you can do it!     [Dream] >>correctI wanted to be a Architecture when I was child. >>I wanted to be an Architect when I was a child.because, I thought to build huge building which like a Empire State would be wonderful job.>>Building a huge structure like the Empire State would be a wonderful job, I thought So, I prepared to mathematics. >>So I planned to take up mathematicsbut, I realized that I don't have talent about math >>but then I realized, I don't have talent when it comes to mathfor that reason, I changed my dream when I was teenager. >>for that reason, I changed my dream when I was a teenager.nowaday my dream is be a good leader at small team in global business group. >>Now, my dream is to be a good leader of a small team in a global business group. 

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