003.[Dream]
학생이 쓴 원문
[Dream]
I wanted to be a Architecture when I was child.
because, I thought to build huge building which like a Empire State would be wonderful job.
So, I prepared to mathematics.
but, I realized that I don't have talent about math
for that reason, I changed my dream when I was teenager.
nowaday my dream is be a good leader at small team in global business group.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
I didn't know you wanted to be an architect. I wanted to be an Architect too! But my mom didn't allow me to.
I love drawing that is why. Oh well, dreams are meant to be changed sometimes. Good luck in beco[이름]g a good leader
[이름]! I know you can do it!
[Dream]
>>correctI wanted to be a Architecture when I was child.
>>I wanted to be an Architect when I was a child.because, I thought to build huge building which like a Empire State would be wonderful job.>>Building a huge structure like the Empire State would be a wonderful job, I thought
So, I prepared to mathematics.
>>So I planned to take up mathematicsbut, I realized that I don't have talent about math
>>but then I realized, I don't have talent when it comes to mathfor that reason, I changed my dream when I was teenager.
>>for that reason, I changed my dream when I was a teenager.nowaday my dream is be a good leader at small team in global business group.
>>Now, my dream is to be a good leader of a small team in a global business group.
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