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2019-01-03 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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>> How can New Year\'s resolutions be a good opportunity for change? Most people need to strong motivations when they attemt to change their habits or to begin to make new good habits. In that respect, New Year\'s resolutions could be a fine catalyst. The word \'first day of new year\' has a magical power and make you expect something special to happen when you start something on that day. Such beliefs make people work and sometimes produce actual results. Therefore New Year\'s resolutions are known as a good opportunity for change.

강사 첨삭

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Jean

How can New Year\'s resolutions be a good opportunity for change?

Most people need to strong motivations when they attemt to change their habits or to begin to make new good habits.
>> Most people need strong motivations when they attempt to change their habits or start new ones.

In that respect, New Year\'s resolutions could be a fine catalyst.
>> correct

The word \'first day of new year\' has a magical power and make you expect something special to happen when you start something on that day.
>> or: The words \'first day of the new year\' has a magical power and make you expect that someone special would happen when you start something on that day.

Such beliefs make people work and sometimes produce actual results.
>> or: Such beliefs make people work conscientiously and sometimes produce actual results.

Therefore New Year\'s resolutions are known as a good opportunity for change.
>> For this reason, New Year\'s resolutions are known as a good opportunity for change.

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