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2019-02-19 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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In 3-5 sentences, answer the question below: >> Tell me about your last visit to a park in as much detail as you can. I\'m not sure but maybe three or four months ago, I visited 2.28 Park which is placed in the middle of the downtown for killing some time while waiting my friend. There were a bunch of cafes adjacent to the park however, I wasn\'t in a mood of sipping coffee so, I chose to stop by there. It was a really typical type of a Korean park where looks so artificial and has some tonnes of trees, a square and soggy and dusty benches. Also you can\'t miss some kind of people who hide in the shadows and make suspicious sounds with their partners or who cover themselves with blankets which were made of alcohol, poor judgement and shame and zonk out. Such a lovely place, right?

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Jean


In 3-5 sentences, answer the question below:

  Tell me about your last visit to a park in as much detail as you can.

I\'m not sure but maybe three or four months ago, I visited 2.28 Park which is placed in the middle of the downtown for killing some time while waiting my friend.

>> I\'m not sure but maybe three or four months ago, I visited 2.28 Park, which is placed in the middle of downtown, to kill some time while waiting my friend.

 There were a bunch of cafes adjacent to the park however, I wasn\'t in a mood of sipping coffee so, I chose to stop by there.

>> There were a bunch of cafes adjacent to the park however, I wasn\'t in the mood for coffee so I chose to stop by at the park.

 It was a really typical type of a Korean park where looks so artificial and has some tonnes of trees, a square and soggy and dusty benches.

>> It was a very typical Korean park where everything looks so artificial and has a bunch of trees, a square, and wet and dusty benches.

 Also you can\'t miss some kind of people who hide in the shadows and make suspicious sounds with their partners or who cover themselves with blankets which were made of alcohol, poor judgement and shame and zonk out.

>> Also, we can\'t consider that place decent as there are some people who use it for dating and even do something that should be done in private or who cover themselves with blankets that smelled of alcohol and shame, and due to poor judgment just zonked out.

 Such a lovely place, right?

>> It\'s such a lovely place, right?

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