02.16.21 About Plastic surgery and Beauty .
학생이 쓴 원문
1. Do you think that different cultures think about beauty differently?
Yes, It depends on different culture. Because we have individual different personalities and characteristics when we grow up.
And we experience around different environment.
2. What do you think of plastic surgery?
I believe that you can take plastic surgery but it is not good way to express what you took.
It can be effected to young children. Actually they are beautiful the way they are. But displaying plastic surgery could be popular even they aren’t into that.
3. What is the most common plastic surgery in your country?
I believe that people care about their appearance from what other people look at them.
That’s why they want to have big eyes and high nose and an oval face.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Steph!
Thank you for your response. Plastic surgery is really a new norm. It\'s getting popular to a lot of people. However, I totally agree with you that it always depends on you and it should be what you want and not what other\'s want you to do. By the way, your sentences make sense. You just need to be mindful of the punctuation marks. I also suggested some new expressions that could somehow convey your ideas better. Keep it up!
3. What is the most common plastic surgery in your country?
>>CORRECT
I believe that people care about their appearance from what other people look at them.
~Elica~
1. Do you think that different cultures think about beauty differently?
>>CORRECT
Yes, It depends on different culture.
Yes, It depends on different culture.
>>Yes, it depends on different cultures.
Because we have individual different personalities and characteristics when we grow up.
>>CORRECT
And we experience around different environment.
And we experience around different environment.
>>CORRECT
2. What do you think of plastic surgery?
2. What do you think of plastic surgery?
>>CORRECT
I believe that you can take plastic surgery but it is not good way to express what you took.
I believe that you can take plastic surgery but it is not good way to express what you took.
>>I believe that you an undergo plastic surgery but it is not a good way to express what you think.
It can be effected to young children.
It can be effected to young children.
>>It can affect young children.
Actually they are beautiful the way they are.
>>CORRECT
But displaying plastic surgery could be popular even they aren’t into that.
>>CORRECT
>>CORRECT
3. What is the most common plastic surgery in your country?
>>CORRECT
I believe that people care about their appearance from what other people look at them.
>>I believe that people care about their appearance and on how people see them.
That’s why they want to have big eyes and high nose and an oval face.
That’s why they want to have big eyes and high nose and an oval face.
>>That’s why they want to have big eyes, high nose and an oval face.
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