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2023-03-10 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

학생이 쓴 원문

~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: Are video games good for relieving stress? I think video games reduce stress. So, video games become my hobby. Among them, I enjoy doing with my friends. Single playing games is boring and tiresome. Possibly I paly a game that online play games.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Are video games good for relieving stress?

I think video games reduce stress.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> I think playing video games reduces stress.

So, video games become my hobby.

So, playing video games became my hobby.

Among them, I enjoy doing with my friends.

>> I enjoy doing it with my friends.

OR >> I enjoy playing video games with my friends.

Single playing games is boring and tiresome.

>> Playing single-player games is boring and tiresome.

Possibly I paly a game that online play games.

>> I play online games as possible as I can.

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