03/13
학생이 쓴 원문
Good morning, T.Becca~!
My baby's condition was becoming worse and better yesterday.
I'm in my office and doning my homework.
It's cloudy so I feel gloomy. How about the weather in your area?
Today's title is a little difficult to describe but I'm going to do my best. ^^
I think that the best important quality of a boss is how to suggest the company's vision.
Another quality is how to lead his members(employees) and to attract their ability.
As you know, any decision of pesonnel can't make a big change but most decisions make a big change and affect the company's future.
If your boss make a wrong decision, your company will face some problems soon.
The higher a person make a decision, the bigger some results come to your company whether it is good or not.
Honestly, some companys are having some trobles in Korea due to decisions of their selection.
Have a nice day and see you~!
강사 첨삭
Hello Sir [이름]!
Thank you so much for your time and effort to do your homework.
I know that you are busy with work and you still have to take care of your baby at home.
I hope your baby gets well very soon.
Well, it is sunny here in our city. It\'s a good day today.
See you in class :)
~Teacher Becca~
Here are some corrections:
Good morning, T.Becca~!
>> correct :)My baby\'s condition was becoming worse and better yesterday.
>> My baby\'s condition kept on changing yesterday, from better to worse and the other way around. I\'m in my office and doning my homework.
>> I am in my office, doing my homework.It\'s cloudy so I feel gloomy.
>> correct!
>> OR: The cloudy weather makes me feel gloomy.
How about the weather in your area?
>> correct!
>> How about the weather in your city?Today\'s title is a little difficult to describe but I\'m going to do my best. ^^>> Today\'s homework is a little difficult to answer, but I\'m going to do my best.^^I think that the best important quality of a boss is how to suggest the company\'s vision.
>> I think that the best and most important quality of a boss is the ability to give suggestions to contribute to the company\'s vision.Another quality is how to lead his members(employees) and to attract their ability.>> Another quality is being a good leader to his members or employees. He should be able to develop their skills and abilities.As you know, any decision of pesonnel can\'t make a big change but most decisions make a big change and affect the company\'s future.
>> As you know, not all decisions made can create a big change, but the most effective decisions can make big positive changes toward the company\'s future. If your boss make a wrong decision, your company will face some problems soon.
>> If your boss makes a wrong decision, the company might be facing some problems soon. The higher a person make a decision, the bigger some results come to your company whether it is good or not.>> The higher the decision, the bigger are the results-- whether good or bad.Honestly, some companys are having some trobles in Korea due to decisions of their selection.>> Honestly, some companies are having trouble in Korea due to wrong decisions. Have a nice day and see you~!
>> correct :)
>> Have a nice day. See you!
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