05.09 homework

2018-05-09 · 첨삭 강사 Grace

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What are the reasons why do people easily give up to a challenge? I think people who easily give up to a challenge don't have any definite goals. If they have a goal and concentrate to achieve that goal, they can make more detailed plan. The detailed plan can help them to correct their mind. And also they usally set their goals too unreal. If they have unreal goals, they have difficulty to achieve their goals, and they tend to give up all of their challenges.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Mandy :)

Thank you so much for doing your homework.

Please check your corrections below^^

I think people who easily give up to a challenge don\'t have any definite goals.
>>I think the people who easily give up to a challenge is they don\'t have any definite goals.

If they have a goal and concentrate to achieve that goal, they can make more detailed plan.
>> If they have a goal and if they are concentrated to achieve that goal, they can make more detailed plans.

The detailed plan can help them to correct their mind. And also they usually set their goals too unreal.
>> A detailed plan can help them to correct their mind. And also they can usually set their goals too unreal

If they have unreal goals, they have difficulty to achieve their goals, and they tend to give up all of their challenges.
>> If they don\'t have a goal, it will be difficult to achieve their goals, and they tend to give up all of their challenges.

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