05.25 homework
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Why our physical health and mental health are important?
Because If we live until 80 olds, It is important to live healthy.
Also to manage ourself is related to our family's happy.
If we ill from physical or mental problem, our family is very worrying about that.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Mandy:)
Thank you so much for doing your homework ^^
And please check your corrections below!
Because If we live until 80 olds, It is important to live healthy.
>> Physical health and mental health are important is because we live until 80 years olds and it is very important to live healthy.
Also to manage ourself is related to our family\'s happy.
>> And also to manage ourselves it is related to our family\'s happiness
If we ill from physical or mental problem, our family is very worrying about that.
>> If we are ill, physically or we are mentally ill, our family will be worrying about that.
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