05/Dce
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
In my opinion, restricting air travel is not a fundamental solution to prevent air pollution.
Nowadays air plane is necessary for people because our zone of life is extending to the whole world.
I searched for cause of air pollution on the internet, they said air pollution from the transportation is 4th reason and the biggest reason is “Good & Services we buy”.
Therefore I think we should follow campaign for air pollution such as recycling, plant trees, using public transportation and saving electricity.
In my opinion, restricting air travel is not a fundamental solution to control and or prevent air pollution.
Nowadays, air crafts are necessary for people in many ways; it could be that our life zone is extending to the whole world.
I then searched for the causes of air pollution on the internet, and this is what I have found. Air pollution that is caused by transportations is the 4th reason, the biggest is the \"Goods and services we buy.\" Therefore, I believe that we should allow campaigns for preventing air pollution such as recycling, planting trees, and using public transportations. Finally, let\'s save electricity.
Previous homework:
I think, developing our skills and preparing ourselves for the future when we are still in the University is not enough, because I believe that we could not experience the reality of life unless we go out into the real world.
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