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2017-12-06 · 첨삭 강사 Blair

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Q. Restricting air travel is the only way to prevent air pollution. Do you agree? A. In my opinion, restricting air travel is not a fundamental solution to prevent air pollution. Nowadays air plane is necessary for people because our zone of life is extending to the whole world. I searched for cause of air pollution on the internet, they said air pollution from the transportation is 4th reason and the biggest reason is “Good & Services we buy”. Therefore I think we should follow campaign for air pollution such as recycling, plant trees, using public transportation and saving electricity. on your correction of the last sentence in yesterday I think university is small society. Before go out into the real world, young people should get interpersonal skills. but my intention was "I think university seems like a small society, thus, before going out to the real world, young people should develop their interpersonal skills at that time." Could you check on more?

강사 첨삭

In my opinion, restricting air travel is not a fundamental solution to prevent air pollution.
Nowadays air plane is necessary for people because our zone of life is extending to the whole world.
I searched for cause of air pollution on the internet, they said air pollution from the transportation is 4th reason and the biggest reason is “Good & Services we buy”.
Therefore I think we should follow campaign for air pollution such as recycling, plant trees, using public transportation and saving electricity.

In my opinion, restricting air travel is not a fundamental solution to control and or prevent air pollution.

Nowadays, air crafts are necessary for people in many ways; it could be that our life zone is extending to the whole world.

I then searched for the causes of air pollution on the internet, and this is what I have found. Air pollution that is caused by transportations is the 4th reason, the biggest is the \"Goods and services we buy.\" Therefore, I believe that we should allow campaigns for preventing air pollution such as recycling, planting trees, and using public transportations. Finally, let\'s save electricity.


Previous homework:

I think, developing our skills and preparing ourselves for the future when we are still in the University is not enough, because I believe that we could not experience the reality of life unless we go out into the real world.


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