06-26
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>> How can society help people with mental health problems or stop people from developing them?
Psychotherapy usually has many difficulties to provide for every person.
>> Psychological disorders usually cause a number of difficulties to people.
The way society, and the government can help mentally ill people, is to help prevent them in advance.
>> The society and the government can help mentally ill people by preventing such illness from occurring in the first place.
To care for those who are already infected requires astronomical social costs.
>> Taking care of those who are already suffering from the said condition requires astronomical social costs.
Thus, I hereby propose to include mental examinations in the regular health screening and to provide the treatment at the least cost for who are found something from the regular checking.
>> >> Thus, I hereby propose to include mental examinations in the regular health screening and to provide the treatment at the least possible cost for those who would find problems in the course of such check up.
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