06.Dec
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
As old people once said, when people was young they don’t have enough money but they have only a lot of time and fitness for enjoying. After they are getting old, they have much money and time but they don’t have fitness.
In my opinion, having more money and less free time is good for living comfortably in one’s old age.
However nowadays there are new boom about living we call “YOLO(you only live once)”. That means you should have more free time and enjoy your life, even if you earn less money.
If I can choose the one of these options, my choice is second one for earning less money and having more free time. But the most important thing is that “less money” is over the minimum cost of living.
As old people once said, when people were still young, they don\'t have enough money but they only have a lot of time for recreational activities. After they get old, they have much money and time but they don\'t have the physical body fitness. In my opinion, having more money and less free time is good for living comfortably in one\'s old age. However, nowadays there is a new boom we call \"YOLO\" (you only live once) That means you should have more free time and enjoy your life, even if you earn less money.
If I can choose the one of these options, I\'d probably choose the second one, earning less money and having more free time. But the most important thing is that “less money” is over the minimum cost of living.
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