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학생이 쓴 원문
I bought new computer yesterday, and It arrived today!
so my heart beat so fast in front of the home. I eagerly look forward to use that.
and I saw that computer, I fall in love with the computer! It was so so happy to get computer( It's not mine. but I'm so happy!) It has good graphic card and CPU.
So I was very happy that I can play game well!(this is reason of the happy) I wanted to play game more easily!
강사 첨삭
Hi Linda! That's good to know that you have a brand new computer! ^^, I can sense your happiness in this composition, teacher Grace is really happy for you. Anyway, have a great time playing and don't forget to accomplish your homeworks first before you play. ^.^
T.GRACE
I bought new computer yesterday, and It arrived today!
>> I bought a new computer yesterday and it was delivered today.so my heart beat so fast in front of the home.
>> My heart was beating so fast while I was in front of our house.
I eagerly look forward to use that.
>> I was eagerly looking forward to using that computer.and I saw that computer, I fall in love with the computer!
>> When I saw the computer, it seemes like I fell in love with the computer.
It was so so happy to get computer( It\'s not mine. but I\'m so happy!)
>> I was so happy to have the computer eventhough it's not mine.
It has good graphic card and CPU.>> Corrcet.
So I was very happy that I can play game well!
>> I am very happy because I can play computers games well.
(this is reason of the happy) I wanted to play game more easily!
>> This is actually the reason why I am happy, that is, I can play computer games fastly.
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