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2012-07-30 · 첨삭 강사 Grace

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I bought new computer yesterday, and It arrived today! so my heart beat so fast in front of the home. I eagerly look forward to use that. and I saw that computer, I fall in love with the computer! It was so so happy to get computer( It's not mine. but I'm so happy!) It has good graphic card and CPU. So I was very happy that I can play game well!(this is reason of the happy) I wanted to play game more easily!

강사 첨삭

Hi Linda! That's good to know that you have a brand new computer! ^^, I can sense your happiness in this composition, teacher Grace is really happy for you. Anyway, have a great time playing and don't forget to accomplish your homeworks first before you play. ^.^ T.GRACE I bought new computer yesterday, and It arrived today! >> I bought a new computer yesterday and it was delivered today.so my heart beat so fast in front of the home. >> My heart was beating so fast while I was in front of our house. I eagerly look forward to use that. >> I was eagerly looking forward to using that computer.and I saw that computer, I fall in love with the computer! >> When I saw the computer, it seemes like I fell in love with the computer. It was so so happy to get computer( It\'s not mine. but I\'m so happy!) >> I was so happy to have the computer eventhough it's not mine. It has good graphic card and CPU.>> Corrcet. So I was very happy that I can play game well! >> I am very happy because I can play computers games well. (this is reason of the happy) I wanted to play game more easily! >> This is actually the reason why I am happy, that is, I can play computer games fastly.

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