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2019-07-17 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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In 3~5 sentences, answer the question below: >> How important is a college degree in your country? Korea has the tendency to consider a college degree as the fundamental requirement for getting a job. If someone who is not a college graduate has occupation, that person may be treated unfairly with a high probability. Academic relations are one of the factors controling Korean society. The only way that a man without a degree gets over these kind disadvantages in this country is showing extremely high performances.

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In 3~5 sentences, answer the question below:
>> How important is a college degree in your country?

Korea has the tendency to consider a college degree as the fundamental requirement for getting a job.
>>>>>> correct

If someone who is not a college graduate has occupation, that person may be treated unfairly with a high probability.
>>>> If someone who is not a college graduate has an occupation, it\'s with a high probability that that person may be treated unfairly.

Academic relations are one of the factors controlling Korean society.
>>>>>> correct

The only way that a man without a degree gets over these kind disadvantages in this country is showing extremely high performances.
>>>> The only way that a man without a degree gets over these kinds of disadvantages in this country is to show extremely high performances.

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