07-23
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In 3~5 sentences, answer the question below:
>> Why do people immigrate to other countries?
For a long time, immigration to other countries is considered as chances to change people\'s lives and to gain turning points.
American dream is one of the great instance of this idea.
There are other types of immigrants who are looking for better working conditions or accompany with their families.
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In 3~5 sentences, answer the question below:
>> Why do people immigrate to other countries?
For a long time, immigration to other countries is considered as chances to change people\'s lives and to gain turning points.
>> For a long time, immigration to other countries has been considered as a chance to change people\'s lives and gain a turning point.
American dream is one of the great instance of this idea.
>> The American dream is one of the greatest instances of this idea.
There are other types of immigrants who are looking for better working conditions or accompany with their families.
>> There are other types of immigrants who are looking for better working conditions or place where they can live with their families.
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