07/28 Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Q) What would you do if someone lends you one million won?
A) If I have to borrow money because I need it, I will use it where it is really needed, but if possible, I will not borrow money. There is a Korean proverb that says, \"You should not borrow money from close friends.\" This means that you can lose both money and friends.
강사 첨삭
Hi Mr. [이름] you expressed your thoughts well, and your message was clear and thoughtful. I just adjusted the first sentence to make it more natural and concise in English. Try to avoid repeating the word \"money\" too closely and use expressions like \"truly necessary\" instead of \"really needed\" for a more natural tone. Also, “avoid borrowing” sounds smoother than “will not borrow.” Lastly, you may separate \'\'but if possible\'\' and make it into a new sentence instead for better flow and emphasis. These small word choices can make your writing sound more fluent. Great job sharing a meaningful proverb. You\'re improving steadily, Mr. [Name]. Please do keep it up.
~ T. Lia
If I have to borrow money because I need it, I will use it where it is really needed, but if possible, I will not borrow money.
>> If I have to borrow money because I need it, I will use it only where it is truly necessary. But if possible, I will avoid borrowing money.
There is a Korean proverb that says, \"You should not borrow money from close friends.\"
>> CORRECT
This means that you can lose both money and friends.
>> CORRECT
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