08Nov2024_homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Writing task: What time of day is best for exercising? Why?
Answer : I am exercising at dawn. because  that\'s the only time I can exercise while raising a child, But after doing it, I ws able to start the day very refreshing and vigorous, and I was able to use the day for a long time.
And there is a saying that if you are healthy, you should exercis in the morning, and if you want to lose weight, you should exercise in the eveing.
As I get older, I can\'t help but think about I health.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Ms. [Name]! That\'s something new. I guess, I need to exercise in the evening then. Thank you for sharing!
-T. Sonny
I am exercising at dawn. because  that\'s the only time I can exercise while raising a child,
>>And there is a saying that if you are healthy, you should exercise in the morning, and if you want to lose weight, you should exercise in the evening.
As I get older, I can\'t help but think about I health.
>> Correct!
But after doing it, I ws able to start the day very refreshing and vigorous, and I was able to use the day for a long time.
>>But after doing it, I was able to start my day very refreshingly and vigorously, hence, I was able to last the whole day.
And there is a saying that if you are healthy, you should exercis in the morning, and if you want to lose weight, you should exercise in the eveing.>>And there is a saying that if you are healthy, you should exercise in the morning, and if you want to lose weight, you should exercise in the evening.
As I get older, I can\'t help but think about I health.
>>As I get older, I can\'t help but think about my health.
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