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2014-09-19 · 첨삭 강사 Naomi

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Hi, there. How was it today? Was it happy or gloomy?? To me, everyday is same day. Everyday is filled with many things to do. There is not the end. Don't you think it is strange? I am in the train to go to see my family. I am not sure that you know my schedule on Friday. I always take a train on Friday for meeting my family. Maybe I talked about that when we do our class several months ago.^^ Oh my god!! I heard that a typoon was occures in the ocean and is proceeding to my country. It is a bad new to us because Asian game is held in Korea now. Do you enjoy any game which can do outside and enhance our wellbeing?? ^^~ I love every sports that we can enjoy it indoors and even outdoors. Ooops. . It is almost my class time so I shold go to the lobby of this train for answering your call. . See you in 4minutes. Bye~~.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! TGIF

 

After reading this note of yours, I thought that you are such an out-going person and now I know your schedule.

I am very to say that I can\'t remember anything about our previous class. Sorry

But it is nice to know that. Thank you.

 

And yes, I like hiking, trekking, walking, wandering around with nowhere to go. Maybe it is also because of a sense of well-being.

For indoor activity, I am really amused with chess.

Puwajjaja!^^

 

Nice talking you [이름]! See on Monday and take care!

 

-T.Naomi

 

Hi, there.
>>correct

How was it today?
>>correct

Was it happy or gloomy??
>>correct

To me, everyday is same day. Everyday is filled with many things to do. There is not the end. Don\'t you think it is strange?
>>To me, everyday is the same day. Everyday is filled with many things to do. There is no end. Don\'t you think it is strange?

I am in the train to go to see my family. I am not sure that you know my schedule on Friday.

>>I am in the train to see my family. I am not sure that you know my schedule on Friday.

I always take a train on Friday for meeting my family. Maybe I talked about that when we do our class several months ago.^^
>>correct

Oh my god!! I heard that a typoon was occures in the ocean and is proceeding to my country.
>>Oh my God! I heard that a typhoon has occurred in the ocean and is proceeding to my country.

It is a bad new to us because Asian game is held in Korea now.
>>It is a bad news to us because the Asian Game is going to be hold in Korea now.

Do you enjoy any game which can do outside and enhance our wellbeing?? ^^~
>>Do you enjoy any game which can be done outside and enhance our well being? ^^~

I love every sports that we can enjoy it indoors and even outdoors.
>>I love every sports that we can enjoy indoors and even outdoors.

Ooops. . It is almost my class time so I shold go to the lobby of this train for answering your call. .
>>Ooops! It is almost my class time so I should go to the lobby of this train for answering your call.

See you in 4 minutes.

>>correct
Bye~~.

>>correct

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