0919 homework

Hi Logan! Thank you for doing your homework, I appreciate it. The thought of your composition is there, only I guess you have misunderstood \"deserted island\". When we say deserted island it means an uninhabited island, nobody living in it. It doesn\'t mean the desert itself. Please be mindful also with your spelling, punctuations and your contractions. (e.g. I will- I\'ll) and whether to use the articles \"a\" or \"an\". Also, always capitalize your first person singular \"I\". ^ ^

-Teacher Jedah 

-If you were going to a deserted island and could only take three things with you, what would you take?-

First, I\'wll bring some extra jackets.

>>First, I\'ll bring some extra jackets.

Desert\'s temperature changes a lot.

>>Deserts\' temperature changes a lot.

I was told the gap of temprature is about 50 celsius.

>>I was told the temperature could go about 50 Celsius. 

That means, I may die without jackets because of hypothermia.

>>I may die of heat stroke. (50 degrees Celsius is quite hot, so I don\'t think you will suffer from hypothermia. Hypothermia is risk of cold exposure especially in the winter.  )

That\'s the reason why i bring some jackets.

>>That\'s the reason why I bring some jackets. 

Second, I will bring an first-aid kit.

>>Second, I will bring a first-aid kit. 

As you know, The most important thing in survival situation is health.

>>As you know, the most important thing in a survival situation is health.

Especially, in desert, There\'re many factors which hurts me.

>>Especially in the desert, there are many factors that can hurt me.

At first, i can\'t distinguish foods which i can eat. So i\'ll have a stomachache.

>>First, I am not keen with distinguishing poisonous from non poisonous food. If I would ingest some, I\'d probably have a stomachache.

So it shold have bends, digestive medicines, and painkiller.

>>So, I should have bands, digestive medicines, and painkillers.

Last thing is long-lasting foods.

>>Finally, I would bring some food that would quite last for long.

For example, canned foods and snack bars.

>>Correct

Its shelf life is quite long.

>>Correct or

I guess there\'re a few food as well as water.

>>I guess some food and water as well. 

Water is better, but i can\'t bring them a lot because it\'s so heavy.

>>Water is a good thing to bring, but I can\'t bring a lot because it would be very heavy. 

So it\'s my second best food plan.

>>Correct

And the reason why I won\'t bring my cell phone is that there\'s no wifi and network maybe.

>>Correct

 ps. I listen to the audio file. And i surprised with my horrible R pronunciation. How can I correct?

>>You can do and practice the following: