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2023-01-16 · 첨삭 강사 Donna

학생이 쓴 원문

I have never lived far away from my family. It\'s just several times to stay away from my family when I went to travel abroad. So, I haven\'t experienced how I feel if I couldn`t see my family easily. Although I don\'t live with my family now, I always feel comfortable because I can meet my family anytime if I want. However, if I live far from my family and I couldn`t meet them conveniently, I feel lonely. Also, I couldn\'t help them easily and on the contrary they couldn\'t help me directly. I\'m very grateful for I live and work nearby my family\'s house.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Dr. [이름]!

Being a million miles away from our family can be challenging since we can only have ourselves to count on and we have to stay independent. Well, if you will be away from your family, I think you will be just fine because you are a very strong and independent lady.

Kindly go over my suggestions below that include the correct order or words (syntax) as well as placing a pronoun to avoid being redundant in one sentence. Overall, you made an excellent piece of writing, great job!

-T. Donna~

I have never lived far away from my family.
>> Correct!

It\'s just several times to stay away from my family when I went to travel abroad.

>> Correct!
Or: I was just a few times to stay away from my family when I went to travel abroad.

So, I haven\'t experienced how I feel if I couldn`t see my family easily.

>> So, I haven\'t experienced feeling that I couldn`t see my family easily.

Although I don\'t live with my family now, I always feel comfortable because I can meet my family anytime if I want.

>> Although I don\'t live with my family now, I always feel comfortable because I can meet them anytime I want.

However, if I live far from my family and I couldn`t meet them conveniently, I feel lonely.

>> Correct!

Also, I couldn\'t help them easily and on the contrary they couldn\'t help me directly.

>> Correct!

Or: Also, I couldn\'t help them easily, and on the contrary, they couldn\'t help me directly.

I\'m very grateful for I live and work nearby my family\'s house.

>> Correct!

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