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2019-01-15 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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[Where do you think the future of medicine will be? Genetics? Cybernetics? Chemistry?] I heard that the first job disappeared by AI(Artificial Intelligence) is doctor, because AI can collect data and prescribe best way with maximum probability. And one of the most popular study is a genetic engineering. They say we can control genetically before baby born, near future. It means we can choose high quality DNA and some illness can be prevent in advance. I think this is very dangerous morally. Many people want to born a baby having high intelligence. In the world, only smart human will be remained. Anyway, I think future medicine will be based on genetics within 100 years. I hope I also want to have the benefit in my old age. If so, I must earn a lot of money now... hahaha P.s. teacher Jedah, I have a conference trip from tomorrow to Saturday. So, I will stop the class, and I would start our class again from Monday. See you on Monday. ^^

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Thanks for doing your homework. I appreciate it. Thanks for the heads up too! Enjoy your conference and hope to talk to you on Monday. ^ ^

Notable thoughts on this one! You gave me something to think about. I was moved with imagination while reading your composition! ^ ^ Yes, the future of medicine is far beyond imagination but with the advancement of technology, I guess anything is possible. I only hope that humanity will use it for the good of all and not for greedy reasons. ^ ^

-Teacher Jedah


I heard that the first job disappeared by AI(Artificial Intelligence) is doctor, because AI can collect data and prescribe best way with maximum probability. 

>>I heard that the first job that AI will take over is a doctor, AI\'s can collect data more efficiently and could accurately prescribe the best remedy.
And one of the most popular study is a genetic engineering. 

>>And one of the most popular study is genetic engineering. 
They say we can control genetically before baby born, near future.

>>They say that in the future, we can genetically control/modify an infant before it\'s even born.
It means we can choose high quality DNA and some illness can be prevent in advance. 

>>It means we can choose high quality DNA and some illnesses can be prevented in advance. 
I think this is very dangerous morally. 

>>I think this is morally dangerous.
Many people want to born a baby having high intelligence. 

>>Many people want to have a baby having high intelligence. 
In the world, only smart human will be remained. 

>>In the future of our world, only smart humans will remain.
Anyway, I think future medicine will be based on genetics within 100 years.

>>Anyway, I think the future of medicine will be based on genetics within 100 years.
I hope I also want to have the benefit in my old age. 

>>I also hope that I could benefit from it in my old age.
If so, I must earn a lot of money now... hahaha

>>Correct ^ ^

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