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Robots going to decrease ultimately our quality of life.
It looks like increasing our quality of life.
We can see very easily automatic counter in restaurants or marts.
It is very comfortable and saves money for owners.
They don\'t make a mistake and need a break like humans.
They can work forever without eating or sleeping.
Many robots including AI already substituted the job or position of humans.
It doesn\'t mean we should not use robots.
However, we should control and use robots positively.
The job paradigm will tremendously change in the future.
We can not change the flow, it is already started.
But, we should prepare in advance.
We need to keep the skills to control robots, not replace them.
I also don\'t know what should we do to get ready for AI era.
But many leaders say that we should improve humans\' creativity and imagination, just not rational things.
Robots and computers are very rational and logical existence.
So, we should develop different sides of them, not competition.
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Hi [이름]! Wonderful thoughts you have here. Thank you, I really appreciate the effort. ^ ^
I have to agree with you, develop them in a way that we can co exist and not compete with them. Anyway, they are our creations, we still should have the upper hand!^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
>>Robots will ultimately decrease the quality of life.
It looks like increasing our quality of life.
It looks like increasing our quality of life.
>>It may look like it is increasing the quality of life.
We can see very easily automatic counter in restaurants or marts.
We can see very easily automatic counter in restaurants or marts.
>>We can easily see automatic counters in restaurants or marts.
It is very comfortable and saves money for owners.
It is very comfortable and saves money for owners.
>>CORRECT
They don\'t make a mistake and need a break like humans.
They don\'t make a mistake and need a break like humans.
>>They don\'t make mistakes nor need to take a break like humans.
They can work forever without eating or sleeping.
They can work forever without eating or sleeping.
>>CORRECT
Many robots including AI already substituted the job or position of humans.
Many robots including AI already substituted the job or position of humans.
>>Many robots including AI have already substituted the job or position of humans.
It doesn\'t mean we should not use robots.
It doesn\'t mean we should not use robots.
>>CORRECT
However, we should control and use robots positively.
However, we should control and use robots positively.
>>CORRECT
The job paradigm will tremendously change in the future.
The job paradigm will tremendously change in the future.
>>CORRECT
>>A tremendous paradigm shift may happen in the future.
We can not change the flow, it is already started.
We can not change the flow, it is already started.
>>We can not change the flow, it has already started.
But, we should prepare in advance.
But, we should prepare in advance.
>>CORRECT
We need to keep the skills to control robots, not replace them.
We need to keep the skills to control robots, not replace them.
>>CORRECT
I also don\'t know what should we do to get ready for AI era.
I also don\'t know what should we do to get ready for AI era.
>>CORRECT
But many leaders say that we should improve humans\' creativity and imagination, just not rational things.
But many leaders say that we should improve humans\' creativity and imagination, just not rational things.
>>CORRECT
Robots and computers are very rational and logical existence.
>>Robots and computers are very rational and logical creations.
So, we should develop different sides of them, not competition.
So, we should develop different sides of them, not competition.
>>So, we should develop different sides of them, not to compete with them.
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