1. 24. Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
I think the most advantageous thing of children having a school uniform is that it can hide the gap between the rich and poor. It is not ashamed to be poor but it can make poor children feel deprivation. Society is not fair but I think at least children must be fair. Because they have many things to feel except deprivation before being adults.
I think the most disadantageous thing of children having a school uniform is that it heads children off efforts to express thier personaility. There\'re many designs and colors in clothes and choosing one of them can express the person\'s personaility.
I think the most advantageous thing of children having a school uniform is that it can hide the gap between the rich and the poor. It is not a shame to be poor but it can make poor children feel deprivation. Society is not fair but I think at least children must be fair. Because they have many things to feel except deprivation before becoming adults. And the most disadvantageous thing of children having a school uniform is that it heads children off efforts to express their personality and the freedom to express themselves through fashion.
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