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2018-01-26 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

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If I pay more tax, it will make more jobs or better welfare for the poor. collected tax will go to the place that require more budget hard. But It doesn't make happy for everyone. because most of people earn not many money, increased tax cause people to be upset and to demand decreased tax..

강사 첨삭

Good evening, [이름]! (^_^)/

Thank you so much for accomplishing your homework.

You have good ideas to share. Just simplify your sentences and avoid unnecessary words.

We can talk about this in class next time.^^

See you then! Have a good night! :)

_T. Mayleen ^-^

If I pay more tax, it will make more jobs or better welfare for the poor.

>>> CORRECT!
collected tax will go to the place that require more budget hard.

>>> Collected tax will go to the place that require more budget badly.
But It doesn\'t make happy for everyone. because most of people earn not many money, increased tax cause people to be upset and to demand decreased tax..

>>> However, it will not make all people happy because most are average earners and increasing the tax will upset them. They will then demand to decrease the tax.

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