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2019-01-28 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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[Describe someone you respect deeply.] In Korea, we call Mentor who we respect deeply and want to be like them. I don\'t have a person who I respect deeply. But, I was deeply impressed by one woman who I worked together, when I have been lived in Kyoto. She was very small woman. She is three years older than me, but looks like elementary school due to her very short height. I think she is basically smart. I like conversation with her about my research. She didn\'t have a baby intentionally, in spite of long a married life. Finally, she changed her mind and had a baby. I surprised her life balance after bone baby. In Korea, many women still have a difficulty after got a baby in a society. Although her working time was decreased at school, she was researched continuously and publish very good paper at home. If I will have a baby, I want to be her. I want to do well care family and my research both.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! A Happy Monday to you! Hope you will have an enjoyable one! ^ ^

Thank you for sharing your thoughts on this one. I\'m sure you will be a great Mom and at the same time a very good researcher. You know very well that women are good at multi-tasking! ^ ^

-Teacher Jedah



In Korea, we call Mentor who we respect deeply and want to be like them.

>>In Korea, we call a person we respect deeply and want to be like them a Mentor.
I don\'t have a person who I respect deeply. 

>>Correct
But, I was deeply impressed by one woman who I worked together, when I have been lived in Kyoto.

>>But, I was deeply impressed with a woman whom I worked with in Kyoto, Japan.
She was very small woman. 

>>She was a very small woman.
She is three years older than me, but looks like elementary school due to her very short height.

>>She is three years older than me but she looks like an elementary student due to her short stature.
I think she is basically smart.

>>Correct
I like conversation with her about my research. 

>>I enjoyed my conversations with her especially about my research.
She didn\'t have a baby intentionally, in spite of long a married life.

>>She intentionally not want to have a baby, in spite of being married long.
Finally, she changed her mind and had a baby. 

>>Correct
I surprised her life balance after bone baby. 

>>I was surprised with how she balanced her life after she had the baby.
In Korea, many women still have a difficulty after got a baby in a society.

>>In Korea, many women still have difficulty balancing their lives after having a baby.
Although her working time was decreased at school, she was researched continuously and publish very good paper at home. 

>>Although her working time was decreased at school, she continuously did her work at home and even published a very good paper.
If I will have a baby, I want to be her. 

>>If I will have a baby, I want to be like her.
I want to do well care family and my research both.

>>I want to take care of my family well and at the same time continue with my research.

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