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Good afternoon Ms. [이름].
Thank you for sending me clarifications of your answers during our class. Anyway, have some time to review also the corrections below.
Thank you and enjoy your day!
Always,
Kathrine ^^
1. When did you get your first cell phone?
When I was in my ealry 20\'s I got a cell phone whice was my birthday\'s present from my friend.
>> When I was in my early 20\'s I got a cell phone which was a birthday present from my friend.
About 20 years ago, most cell phone\'s were very big and heavy.
>> About 20 years ago, most cell phones were very big and heavy.
>> or: Twenty (20) years go, most cell phones were very big and heavy.
2. Do you know anyone who desn\'t own a cell phone?
I don\'t know. Nowadays old and young people have their cell phone.
>> correct! (cell phones)
>> or: I have no idea. Nowadays, old and young people have their own cell phones.
Even young children have their cell phone.
>> Even young children have their own cell phones.
Even my youngest daughter who is 9 years old has a cellphone.
>> correct!
>> or: Even my 9-year old youngest daughter has a cellphone.
3. How much do you thing is appropriate for a teenager\'s monthly cell phone bill?
My eldest daughter\'s cell phone bill is about $30.
>> correct!
My cell phone bill is about $60.
>> correct!
When my family use the cell phone with the internet, we use Wi-Fi.
>> correct!
Many teenagers are wasting money with their cellular phone.
>> correct!
I don\'t like to waste money.
>> correct!
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