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4. For what purposes do you think a teenager needs a cell phone?
These days, the cell phone has many funcions.
>> These days, a cellphone has many functions.
>> or; A cellphone has many functions these days.
So many teenagers use their cell phone to study.
>> correct!
>>or: Many teenagers are using their cellphones to study.
Also they have some stresses, they listen tomusic with their cell phone.
>> Also, when they got stressed out, they can listen to music in their cellphone.
I think teenagers need the cell phone.
>> I think teenagers need to have their cellphone.
In my case, my youngest daughter has her cell phone
>> In my case, my youngest daughter has her own cell phone.
I often call her to check on her situation.
>> correct!
5. Are there any reasons why a teenager shouldn\'t have a cell phone?
Some bad teenagers play a lot of games with a cell phone all day.
>> correct!
I think they have to use it for regular time.
>> I think they have to use it for emergency purposes.
>> or: I think they do not have to use it in a regular basis.
* Friendship with the OPPOSITE SEX?
In my opinion, they can become friends with each other.
>> correct!
However after getting married they cannpt be friends with each other any longer.
>> correct! (cannot)
I think thay have to focus their family, husband or wife.
>> I think they have to focus to their family, husband or wife.
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