1. 29. Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Even though I can earn much money, If I don\'t have much time to spend that money, my life won\'t be happy. But, if the work which I should do all day is very interesting and I\'m happy during the work, I can be happy though I don\'t have much time and also get much money.
My dream is to become an elementary school teacher. I like the work and there will be many vacations and free time so I guess I can be happy all day.
Even though I can earn much money, but if I don\'t have much time to spend what I earned, I won\'t be happy. But, if the tasks which I should do all day are very interesting, and I could be happy while working, then I can be happy in a balanced way. My dream is to become an elementary school teacher, I like the work and there will be a lot of holidays and vacations so I guess I can be happy all day.
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