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2013-12-17 · 첨삭 강사 Rowena

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Since jame's father was ill in bed, her family is always depressed. A few days ago, her father failed in buseness and then he went down with paralysis because of the shock after all. her father whose half body is paralyzed can't get about well. And he got a speech disorder as an aftereffect. He got more reticent eve though he is a man of few words. His clouded eyes looked only the ceilling of the room all day. One winter day, James, the older brother of Jane, received a letter of the result and came back home. (I have a question. I want to say that letter what i mentioned. um.. When you pass a exam for university or something, you get a paper. "congraturations on passing the exam! blah blah blah.... I don't know what i have to call it. please let me know!) "Good job, Jmaes! Thank you!" Mother was pleased with his result. However, she couldn't hide her gloomy face soon after.

강사 첨삭

Hi there(^^,)   Energetic Monday!   Thank you so much for your time. I really enjoy talking to you. Do best in every thing that you do.^^ Tell me about your question again in class^^ Be hopeful always and have fun.   Have a beautiful night ahead and sleep well. Take care always.   ~Teacher Mona       Since jame\'s father was ill in bed, her family is always depressed.>> Since Jame\'s father was ill in bed, his family is always depressed.A few days ago, her father failed in buseness and then he went down with paralysis because of the shock after all.>> A few days ago, his a father\'s business was bankrupt that leads to his father\'s sickness which is paralysis.her father whose half body is paralyzed can\'t get about well.>> His father was half body- paralyzed and was bed ridden. And he got a speech disorder as an aftereffect.>> His father also developed speech disorder as a side effect from paralyzation. He got more reticent eve though he is a man of few words.>> He got more reticent even though he is a man of a few words.His clouded eyes looked only the ceilling of the room all day.>> His clouded eyes looked only at the ceilling of the room all day long.One winter day, James, the older brother of Jane, received a letter of the result and came back home.>> One day during the winter season, James the older brother of Jane, received a confirmation letter informing him the result of his exam for the university and decided to go home.  (I have a question. I want to say that letter what i mentioned. um.. When you pass a exam for university or something, you get a paper. \"congraturations on passing the exam! blah blah blah.... I don\'t know what i have to call it. please let me know!)\"Good job, Jmaes! Thank you!\">> \"Good job, James! I am very proud of you! Thank you!\"Mother was pleased with his result. >> His mother was very pleased with the result of his exam. However, she couldn\'t hide her gloomy face soon after. >> However his mother couldn\'t hide her gloomy face afterwards.

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