1. 5. Homework

2018-02-06 · 첨삭 강사 Blair

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HOMEWORK: ** WRITING TASK ** Shopping is the favorite pastime for most of the young people. Why do you think is that? Do you think they should be encouraged to do some other useful activities? Actually, I don't like shopping. I know shopping is essensial for being fashionable and attractive. But I hate spending time on choosing. I have some friends who are crazy about shopping. I think they feel good when they buy someting and use it and are complimented by other people. I don't think they should be encouraged to do some other activities. If they use thier money properly when they do shopping, It's not other people's business.

강사 첨삭

Actually, I don\'t like shopping. I know shopping is essensial for being fashionable and attractive. But I hate spending time on choosing.
I have some friends who are crazy about shopping. I think they feel good when they buy someting and use it and are complimented by other people.
I don\'t think they should be encouraged to do some other activities. If they use thier money properly when they do shopping, It\'s not other people\'s business.

Actually, I don\'t like shopping/ I am not really interested in shopping. I know that for some instances, shopping is essential for fashion and attractiveness. But I hate spending time on choosing items to buy. I have some friends who are crazy about shopping, I think they feel good when they buy something and use it, then receive compliments by other people. In my own opinion, I don\'t think they should be encouraged to do some other activities, if they use their own money to buy essential things when shopping then I think it\'s not other people\'s business.

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