1/6 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
[What is something you did that you think you can not?]
I went to Halla mountain twice last year.
I thought I could not succeed because I became fat and I hate climbing.
But finally, I claimed the top of the mountain.
When I arrived at the top of the mountain, I don\'t know why, but I was crying.
I felt tremendous sense of accomplishment.
I got self-confidence.
Although it was a very small thing, I realized something.
Before then, I thought that if I have a very strong mind, I can overcome my physical ability.
But it was difficult to overcome my physical ability last year.
And I read a book and this phrase was written \'when we are tired or exhausted, it is easy to give up something to do\'.
I totally agree with that and it was a big realization to me.
So, I started an exercise to built up the body strength and keep from giving up.
Now, although I don\'t enjoy climbing, I like climbing.
It was my big event last year and I am proud of it.
강사 첨삭
Very well thought of homework [이름]! Thank you for sharing! ^ ^
I have to agree with you. No matter how small our accomplishment is, as long as we give our whole heart and strength to it, it is still an accomplishment! ^ ^ We should never stop pushing forward! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
I went to Halla mountain twice last year.
>>CORRECT
I thought I could not succeed because I became fat and I hate climbing.
I thought I could not succeed because I became fat and I hate climbing.
>>CORRECT
But finally, I claimed the top of the mountain.
But finally, I claimed the top of the mountain.
>>CORRECT
When I arrived at the top of the mountain, I don\'t know why, but I was crying.
When I arrived at the top of the mountain, I don\'t know why, but I was crying.
>>When I arrived at the top of the mountain, I didn\'t know why, but I was crying.
I felt tremendous sense of accomplishment.
I felt tremendous sense of accomplishment.
>>I felt a tremendous sense of accomplishment.
I got self-confidence.
I got self-confidence.
>>CORRECT
>>I have finally gained self confidence.
Although it was a very small thing, I realized something.
Although it was a very small thing, I realized something.
>>CORRECT
Before then, I thought that if I have a very strong mind, I can overcome my physical ability.
Before then, I thought that if I have a very strong mind, I can overcome my physical ability.
>>Before then, I thought that if I have a very strong mind, I can overcome my physical weakness.
But it was difficult to overcome my physical ability last year.
But it was difficult to overcome my physical ability last year.
>>But it was difficult to overcome my physical weakness last year.
And I read a book and this phrase was written \'when we are tired or exhausted, it is easy to give up something to do\'.
And I read a book and this phrase was written \'when we are tired or exhausted, it is easy to give up something to do\'.
>>CORRECT
I totally agree with that and it was a big realization to me.
I totally agree with that and it was a big realization to me.
>>CORRECT
So, I started an exercise to built up the body strength and keep from giving up.
So, I started an exercise to built up the body strength and keep from giving up.
>>So I started exercising to build my strength and to keep me from giving up.
Now, although I don\'t enjoy climbing, I like climbing.
Now, although I don\'t enjoy climbing, I like climbing.
>>CORRECT
It was my big event last year and I am proud of it.
It was my big event last year and I am proud of it.
>>CORRECT
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