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2016-10-04 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

I agree. When I was young, I didn't get an allowance easy. So when I grew up, It was very difficult to get money. I didn't waste money and I saved money. These days, many children don't know it is very difficult to get money. They get easy money so They waste it easy. They don't know it is very dangerous in their future. So I worry about their future.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Ms. [이름]!
I agree with you. I think children nowadays couldn\'t understand how hard their parents work in order to provide for their needs. They don\'t know how to value time nad money. What can we do? I sometimes worry too. Have a nice day, Ms. [이름]! See you tomorrow!

Take care!

~T. Lynn

I agree.

>> correct!
When I was young, I didn\'t get an allowance easy.

>> When I was young, I didn\'t get an allowance easily.
So when I grew up, It was very difficult to get money.

>> correct!
I didn\'t waste money and I saved money.

>> correct!
These days, many children don\'t know it is very difficult to get money.

>> correct!
OR>> These days children don\'t know that it\'s hard to earn money.
They get easy money so They waste it easy.

>> They get money easily so they waste it easily.
They don\'t know it is very dangerous in their future.

>> correct!
So I worry about their future.

>> correct!

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