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Hi there Ms. [이름]!
In order to earn money, we need to be healthy. To be healthy, we need to eat properly/. Thus, eating breakfast is very important. Good job, Ms. [이름]! See you!
Take care!
~T. Lynn
Yes, I agree.
>> correct!
After we have breakfast, we can get energy all days.
>>After we have breakfast, we can get energy for the whole day.
Also when we have simple dinner, we can lose our weigh.
>>Also when we have a simple dinner, we can lose our weight.
These days people don\'t have breakfast or have simply breakfast.
>>These days, people don\'t have breakfast or they only have a simple breakfast.
I think nowadays people are very busy and most people have their job and Most people are husband and wife both working.
>>I think nowadays people are very busy and most people work and most husbands and wives are both working.
So they don\'t have much time like my couple.
>> So they don\' have enough time just like my husband and I.
However some diligence couples still have full breakfast for their health.
>>However some diligent couples still have full breakfast for their health.
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