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2017-01-16 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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In my opinion, the most important is for my family the health. If you have a lot of money but you are very ill so you couldn't spend your money in your life. Also your family are not happy if you are gone. When your health is a good, your family and you can be happy.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Ms. [이름]!
You are right, health is the most important so that you could enjoy your life. No matter how rich you are if you are unhealthy and is always in the hospital, I don\'t think you\'ll be able to enjoy life. So let\'s be thankful that we are healthy even if we may not a lot of money. See you later!
Take care!
~T. Lynn
In my opinion, the most important is for my family the health.
>> In my opinion, the most important is for my family to be healthy.
If you have a lot of money but you are very ill so you couldn\'t spend your money in your life.
>> If you have a lot of money but you are very ill then you couldn\'t spend your money to enjoy your life.
Also your family are not happy if you are gone.
>> correct!
When your health is a good, your family and you can be happy.
>> correct!

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