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2017-03-30 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

When I become old woman with my family, I don't want poor life with them. I think that life is like marathon. Nowadays we can live for a long time so we have to prepare for our future step by step. So we have to work when we youth and save money for our future. When we become old men, we can't work despite we want do it. All old men also are very weak. It is the reason why I work for my long life.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Ms. [이름]!
Preparing and saving for the future is ideal but is difficult to do for most people and I\'m one of them.
What about you?
Take care!
~T. Lynn
When I become old woman with my family, I don\'t want poor life with them.
>> When I become an old woman, I don\'t want a poor life with my family.
I think that life is like marathon.
>> I think that life is like a marathon.
Nowadays we can live for a long time so we have to prepare for our future step by step.
>> correct!
So we have to work when we youth and save money for our future.
>> So we have to work while we are young and save money for our future.
When we become old men, we can\'t work despite we want do it.
>> When we become old, we can\'t work despite we want do it.
OR>> When we are old we can\'t work anymore even if we want to.
All old men also are very weak.
>> correct!
It is the reason why I work for my long life.
>> That is why I work for my life in the future.

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