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2017-05-04 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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I am trying to teach saving energy, electricity, water etc. These days espeacily many children don't care about water. In my country water don't have ehough. So I often say to my children you have to save water for our future. We also have to care about electricity, espeacily in summer.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Ms. [이름]!

I think water shortage is a worldwide problem. Many people don\'t care about the environment. Of course, it causes us problem like water shortage, air pollution and others. You are a good mom since you are educating your children about the importance of saving electricity and water. Good job!(\",)

Take care!(\",)

~T. Lynn

I am trying to teach saving energy, electricity, water etc.

>>  I am teaching my children how to save energy, electricity, water etc.

OR>> I always tell my children to save energy, electricity, water and others.
 These days espeacily many children don\'t care about water.

>> These days many children don\'t care about water.
 In my country water don\'t have ehough.

>> In my country, we don\'t have enough water.
 So I often say to my children you have to save water for our future.

>> correct!
 We also have to care about electricity, espeacily in summer.

>> correct!

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