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2017-12-11 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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President in my country is trying to help for the medium-sized companies and the small companies with his wife. His wife, the first lady in my country gave soldiers the fried chicken as a gift. Of course she used the company is the medium-sized. I think it is their solicitude for them. There are many major companies and the small companies in my country but the small companies have a lot of the problems because many people like major's goods. After they begin to use the small companies, many people begin to pay attention. I think President couple is very popular.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Ms. [이름]!(\",)

So what you are saying is that President Moon and his wife want to help small and medium scale industries in your country to succeed so they did this act as an example to the people. They have good intensions but I think some people might not agree with this. Your sentences are longer and you have clearly stated your opinion regarding the issue I asked you so you did a great job, Ms. [이름]!(\",) Keep it up!

Take care!(\",)

~T. Lynn

President in my country is trying to help for the medium-sized companies and the small companies with his wife.

>> Our President, together with his wife, is trying to help the medium-sized companies and the small companies.
 His wife, the first lady in my country gave soldiers the fried chicken as a gift.

>> His wife, the first lady, gave fried chicken as a gift to some soldiers .
 Of course she used the company is the medium-sized.

>>  Of course she used a medium-sized company.
 I think it is their solicitude for them.

>> I think this is their way of showing their concern and care for them.
 There are many major companies and the small companies in my country but the small companies have a lot of the problems because many people like major\'s goods.

>> There are many major companies in our country and the small companies are suffering because many people like using major companies\' goods.
 After they begin to use the small companies, many people begin to pay attention.

>> After they began to use the small companies, many people began to pay attention.
 I think President couple is very popular.

>> I think these is because the president and his wife are very popular.

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