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One of the reasons for climate change is a natural phenomenon.
However, there is no doubt that humans are accelerating the change velocity.
We have a history of extreme climate change in the past.
And many animals of species were died and newly born at that time.
But, the period becomes shorter.
In modern society, the number of humans extremely increased, and accordingly, the emission of global warming gases are also increased.
Actually, the worst existence in the earth might be human.
We pump the minerals and petroleum, and the amount is increasing more because our technology is also improving fastly.
But, animals except for humans consume the limited resource and their population also naturally controlled by nature\'s law of the jungle.
I don\'t want to say that our population should be controlled or we should back to the jungle leaving technologies.
However, at least, we have the responsibility to save and care for nature.
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For nearly all climate scientists, the case is proven that humans are the overwhelming cause of the long-term changes in the climate that we are observing. And that this case should be closed. On the other hand; there have been proofs that it is also a natural phenomenon. But the question is; is it preventable? Unfortunately, some of the effects of global warming are no longer preventable, according to a recent study. Measures to prevent global warming can often be difficult or expensive to implement but we do hope that our government, politicians and major industries must do more about it. ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
One of the reasons for climate change is a natural phenomenon.
>>CORRECT
However, there is no doubt that humans are accelerating the change velocity.
However, there is no doubt that humans are accelerating the change velocity.
>>However, there is no doubt that humans are accelerating the change/situation.
We have a history of extreme climate change in the past.
We have a history of extreme climate change in the past.
>>CORRECT
And many animals of species were died and newly born at that time.
And many animals of species were died and newly born at that time.
>>And many animals of different kinds of species died even the newborns.
But, the period becomes shorter.
>>CORRECT
In modern society, the number of humans extremely increased, and accordingly, the emission of global warming gases are also increased.
In modern society, the number of humans extremely increased, and accordingly, the emission of global warming gases are also increased.
>>Recently, it has been reported that there is an extreme population growth and accordingly, the emission of global warming gases have also increased.
Actually, the worst existence in the earth might be human.
Actually, the worst existence in the earth might be human.
>>I think that the worst beings on earth are humans.
We pump the minerals and petroleum, and the amount is increasing more because our technology is also improving fastly.
We pump the minerals and petroleum, and the amount is increasing more because our technology is also improving fastly.
>>We pump the minerals and petroleum, and the amount is increasing more because our technology is also improving vastly.
But, animals except for humans consume the limited resource and their population also naturally controlled by nature\'s law of the jungle.
But, animals except for humans consume the limited resource and their population also naturally controlled by nature\'s law of the jungle.
>>CORRECT
I don\'t want to say that our population should be controlled or we should back to the jungle leaving technologies.
I don\'t want to say that our population should be controlled or we should back to the jungle leaving technologies.
>>I don\'t want to say that our population should be controlled or we should go back to remote technologies.
However, at least, we have the responsibility to save and care for nature.
However, at least, we have the responsibility to save and care for nature.
>>CORRECT
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