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2018-10-01 · 첨삭 강사 Glenda

학생이 쓴 원문

Hi ^^ I will memorize this sentences for our class tomorrow. Lesson 1 Self Introduction I\'m [이름]. It is my English name. I\'m in my mid-forties. I was brought up in Busan city which has a big harbor and a beautiful white sandly beach. I moved to Pyeongtaek-city Korea with my family when I was 14 years old. I am married and I enjoy my life with my family. My husband and I were blessed with two beautiful children. I didn\'t get the chance to study in a university becase my family was very poor. But it\'s okay. I work at an auto parts company. I like my job and I am a lucky woman for having one. I want to work in my office for a long time. Also, I want my family to be happy for the years to come.

강사 첨삭

Hi ^^
I will memorize this (these) sentences for our class tomorrow.

Lesson 1 Self Introduction
I\'m [이름]. It is my English name.

>> Correct

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I\'m in my mid-forties.

>> Correct
I was brought up in Busan city which has a big harbor and a beautiful white sandly beach.

>> white sand beach
I moved to Pyeongtaek-city Korea with my family when I was 14 years old.

>> Correct
I am married and I enjoy my life with my family.

>> Correct
My husband and I were blessed with two beautiful children.

>> Correct
I didn\'t get the chance to study in a university becase (because) my family was very poor.

>> Correct
But it\'s okay.

>>Correct
I work at an auto parts company.

>> Correct
I like my job and I am a lucky woman for having one.

>>Correct
I want to work in my office for a long time.

>> Correct
Also, I want my family to be happy for the years to come.

>> Correct

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