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I seriously want to have a journey to go to space in my life.
Sometimes I think how small the earth and human in space.
When I think like that, I also think about how small my concerns and worries.
When I was younger, I like to trip to Europe.
It was very interesting and marvelous for experiencing absolutely different cultures and sites with Korea.
But after then, my taste moved to the trip to nature.
When I feel how much amazing and wonderful huge nature, I have interesting.
Now, my taste is moving again.
My research focuses on the material inside of the earth.
But, I realized that the materials also originally came from space or outside of the earth.
I want to confirm that we are a very small species and how big the world in space by myself.
I think if I can go out of the earth in my period, maybe it will be moon practically.
Moon is quite close to the earth, however, If I can go there, my perspective on life will be absolutely changed.
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Hi [이름]! Thank you again for this well-thought-out homework. I must say your writing skill is really good.
You shared a great perspective as to what adventurous thing you would like to do in the future. ^ ^ I never realized that this is how broad your idea of what adventure is! I was only thinking of an earthbound kind of adventure! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
I seriously want to have a journey to go to space in my life.
>>It\'s a lifetime dream for me to embark on a space journey.
Sometimes I think how small the earth and human in space.
Sometimes I think how small the earth and human in space.
>>Sometimes I ponder on how small the earth and humans compared to the vast space.
When I think like that, I also think about how small my concerns and worries.
When I think like that, I also think about how small my concerns and worries.
>>When I think like that, I also think about how small my concerns and worries are.
When I was younger, I like to trip to Europe.
When I was younger, I like to trip to Europe.
>>When I was younger, I like to go on a trip to Europe.
It was very interesting and marvelous for experiencing absolutely different cultures and sites with Korea.
It was very interesting and marvelous for experiencing absolutely different cultures and sites with Korea.
>>It was very interesting and marvelous to experience an absolutely different culture other than Korea.
But after then, my taste moved to the trip to nature.
But after then, my taste moved to the trip to nature.
>>But after then, my preference changed to going on a nature trip.
When I feel how much amazing and wonderful huge nature, I have interesting.
When I feel how much amazing and wonderful huge nature, I have interesting.
>>When I feel how much amazing and wonderful nature is, I become more interested to it.
Now, my taste is moving again.
Now, my taste is moving again.
>>Now, my taste is changing again.
My research focuses on the material inside of the earth.
My research focuses on the material inside of the earth.
>>CORRECT
But, I realized that the materials also originally came from space or outside of the earth.
But, I realized that the materials also originally came from space or outside of the earth.
>>CORRECT
I want to confirm that we are a very small species and how big the world in space by myself.
I want to confirm that we are a very small species and how big the world in space by myself.
>>I want to confirm with my own self and experience that we are a very small species and how vast the space is.
I think if I can go out of the earth in my period, maybe it will be moon practically.
I think if I can go out of the earth in my period, maybe it will be moon practically.
>>I think I will be able to travel into space in this lifetime, I would probably go to the moon.
Moon is quite close to the earth, however, If I can go there, my perspective on life will be absolutely changed.
Moon is quite close to the earth, however, If I can go there, my perspective on life will be absolutely changed.
>>Moon is the nearest heavenly body to earth, if I would have the chance to go there, my perspective in life will absolutely change.
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