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2020-06-05 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

학생이 쓴 원문

spare time I like to spend my time hiking and riding a bike. So, I made a club with my co-workers to be together. I was able to get close to them, developed a good relationship / and built up my physical strength as well. So even after I quit, we still keep in touch / and climb mountains or ride a bike together from time to time. Since I did it together, I was able to do it steadily. I think I learned tenacity, too. stressed I get stressed when the surroundings are messy. So, I am used to cleaning up while working. If there is a meeting, organize it in advance, also clean up after the meeting. I always keep it clean, so my co-workers are happy to work with me. And always maintain workstation areas to a hygiene standard all the time. I think cleanliness can bring good results to the company, too.

강사 첨삭



Hi Donna! Thank you for this thoughts! I appreciate the effort! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah

spare time
I like to spend my time hiking and riding a bike.
>>CORRECT
So, I made a club with my co-workers to be together. 
>>CORRECT
I was able to get close to them, developed a good relationship and built up my physical strength as well.
>>CORRECT
So even after I quit, we still keep in touch and climb mountains or ride a bike together from time to time.
>>CORRECT
Since I did it together, I was able to do it steadily.
>>Since we did it together, I was able to do it steadily.
I think I learned tenacity, too.
>>CORRECT
stressed
I get stressed when the surroundings are messy.
>>CORRECT
So, I am used to cleaning up while working.
>>CORRECT
If there is a meeting, organize it in advance, also clean up after the meeting.
>>If there is a meeting, organize in advance and clean up after.
I always keep it clean, so my co-workers are happy to work with me.
>>CORRECT
And always maintain workstation areas to a hygiene standard all the time.
>>And always maintain workstation areas to a good hygiene standard at all times.
I think cleanliness can bring good results to the company, too.
>>CORRECT

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