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2020-06-08 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

학생이 쓴 원문

My major is chemistry. I always did science experiments in groups. I am used to team activities. I quickly found individual\'s strong points. I suggested dividing positions to make the experiment more effective. there is always an unexpected situation. I always have safety-situational awareness. I inform my team to follow the safety rules and make sure to wear a mask when conducting an experiment with harmful gases. Why choose? At that moment I liked to do science experiments. But I change my mind because as I\'ve been working in the service field over 5 years, I realized that this is fit me better. When I was in my junior year in college I helped elementary and middle school student at local children\'s center. I was in charge of children of different ages from 8 to 15. I tried to communicate at their eye level. I adjusted teaching styles to meet individual needs of students. I let them make their own target scores and let them know what to do to get them.

강사 첨삭

Hi Donna! Thank you for sharing and allowing me to correct it. I hope my corrections will be helpful to you! ^ ^ 
-Teacher Jedah

My major is chemistry. 
>>My major was Chemistry.
>>I majored in Chemistry.
I always did science experiments in groups. 
>>CORRECT 
I am used to team activities. 
>>CORRECT
I quickly found individual\'s strong points. 
>>CORRECT or
>>It\'s quite easy for me to determine each individual\'s strong points.
I suggested dividing positions to make the experiment more effective. 
>>I would often play part in dividing the group and assigning them their tasks to have a good outcome of the experiment.
There is always an unexpected situation.
>>CORRECT or
>>But as every group activity is, there is always an unexpected situation.
I always have safety-situational awareness. 
>>CORRECT or
>>I always keep in mind the safety-situational awareness.
I inform my team to follow the safety rules and make sure to wear a mask when conducting an experiment with harmful gases.
>>CORRECT
At that moment I liked to do science experiments.
>>During those times, I really enjoyed doing science experiments.
But I change my mind because as I\'ve been working in the service field over 5 years, I realized that this is fit me better.
>>CORRECT (..*fits)
When I was in my junior year in college I helped elementary and middle school student at local children\'s center.
>>CORRECT (*students)
I was in charge of children of different ages from 8 to 15. 
>>CORRECT
I tried to communicate at their eye level.
>>CORRECT
I adjusted teaching styles to meet individual needs of students.
>>CORRECT
I let them make their own target scores and let them know what to do to get them.
>>CORRECT

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