1.Do you think it's fair for women to receive a smaller pay than men? Why or why not? 2.What do you
학생이 쓴 원문
I don't thing that to receive a smaller pay than men.
Women and men are different. So it is natural that their's business style and a office life are different.
But it should not the cause of distinction.
If women and men achive a equal fruit of business, they should be paid a equal salary.
In these reason it is not possible that the occupation which are more suitable for women.
Of course any works requires an each items has a self-confidence to the work and they want to the work, it is a suit job for him or her.
I think that people should a work that he or she want to.
강사 첨삭
Hello! Thank you for sending your opinion about the topic..I agree with what you have said that whatever a person wants to do is the suitable job for him or her..That is well-said..Anyway, below are my corrections. If you have questions regarding them, please ask me in class..
T. Ritchel
I don\'t thing that to receive a smaller pay than men.
>> I don\'t think that women should receive a smaller pay than men.Women and men are different.
>> Correct!
So it is natural that their\'s business style and a office life are different.
>> So it is natural that the way they conduct business and their work lives are different.But it should not the cause of distinction.
>>But it should not be the cause of distinction.
If women and men achive a equal fruit of business, they should be paid a equal salary.
>>If women and men achieve equal fruit of business, they should be paid equal salaries.
OR:>> If women and men have the same productivity, they should be compensated equally.In these reason it is not possible that the occupation which are more suitable for women.
>> For these reasons, there should be no occupations which are more suitable for women and vice versa.Of course any works requires an each items has a self-confidence to the work and they want to the work, it is a suit job for him or her.
>> Of course, any work requires confidence from an individual and each individual has a field where he excels. If he/she likes the job,then it is a suitable job for him or her.
I think that people should a work that he or she want to.
>> I think that people should have jobs that they want .
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