1. impeccable 2. let someone down 3. synergy

2022-03-14 · 첨삭 강사 Faith

학생이 쓴 원문

Although I don\'t have much experience in the USA, I can make a good harmony with coworkers in this church. Especially, I believe that my listening skill is going to help this church. I have a plan to go into counseling graduate school in April. I\'m really interested in knowing my innermost self. Above all, through that, I want to have a good relationship with people. My listening skill is not impeccable. But I always try to pay attention to listening to people. Through my behavior that not ready to listen, I don\'t want to let someone down. I think that before listening to people, I always have to pray for meetings. So I know that I can work for people who suffer and need help. I am confident that we can make a good synergy together. In addition, I\'m a person who always does my best. I believe that God allowed my people and my circumstances in faith is the best for me. I don\'t want to doubt God\'s plan for me. I would like to work with you happily in this church.

강사 첨삭

This is excellent, Jane! I hope you can carry it out more naturally with more practice. I am proud of you!-Faith-
Although I don\'t have much experience in the USA, I can make a good harmony with coworkers in this church. 
>> Although I don\'t have much experience in the USA, I can make a good harmony with my coworkers in this church. 
Especially, I believe that my listening skill is going to help this church. 
>> CORRECT
I have a plan to go into counseling graduate school in April. 
>> I have a plan to go into a counseling graduate school in April. 
I\'m really interested in knowing my innermost self. 
>> CORRECT
Above all, through that, I want to have a good relationship with people. 
>> CORRECT
My listening skill is not impeccable. 
>> CORRECT
But I always try to pay attention to listening to people. 
>> CORRECT
OR But I always try to listen to people intently. 
Through my behavior that not ready to listen, I don\'t want to let someone down. 
>> Though my behavior is not ready to listen, I don\'t want to let someone down. 
I think that before listening to people, I always have to pray for meetings. 
>> CORRECT
So I know that I can work for people who suffer and need help. 
>> CORRECT
OR In that case, I would I know that I can work for people who suffer and need help. 
I am confident that we can make a good synergy together. 
>> CORRECT
In addition, I\'m a person who always does my best. 
>> CORRECT
OR Furthermore, I am a type of person who always pursues excellence.
I believe that God allowed my people and my circumstances in faith is the best for me. 
>> I believe that God allowed my people and my circumstances in faith because it is the best for me. 
I don\'t want to doubt God\'s plan for me. 
>> CORRECT
I would like to work with you happily in this church.
>> CORRECT

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