1)my dream(2)

2009-11-23 · 첨삭 강사 JADE

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Also i have get back volunteering and i interested in foreign countries volunteer. Nowdays, i do mentoring volunteer and i meet elementary student for once a week. Also i'm learning in english of official language. I wish for necessary people in foreign countries volunteer field and build more study and experience speedly.

강사 첨삭

Hi again! ^_^

 

Let me correct you:

 

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Also i have get back volunteering and i interested in foreign countries volunteer.

>>I have just gotten back into a volunteering job and I am interested of volunteering internationally someday.

 

Nowdays, i do mentoring volunteer and i meet elementary student for once a week.

>>Nowadays, I do mentoring a tutoring for elementary students once a week.

 

Also I'm learning in English of official language. I wish for necessary people in foreign countries volunteer field and build more study and experience speedly.

>>Also, I뭢 learning English because it is the international means of communication. I wish to become a big person in the field of volunteering and have a lot of experiences in short time.

 

 

---As you have noticed, I rephrase your essay a little, I hope I got your point correctly ^_^ I wish you will write more Grace, I would love to hear a lot from you.. ^_^

 

 

PS: Grace, I hope you can resend your last essay, I lost it here. I haven't read it yet, i'm so sorry.. :(

 

Don't skip your dinner and rest well ^^,

 

T. jana

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