1. What is hoarding? 2. Are you a hoarder? Tell me why.

2021-11-05 · 첨삭 강사 Aki

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Hoarding is purchase items continually. Though the items were already purchased , it can’t stop to buy again. I am not a hoarder. But there is one thing that I buy continually. It is a chocolate. It help me get rid of stress. When I angry at my daughters, I eat a chocolate immediately. It make me calm down. I think it seems a habit. Although I feel like change this habit, I think it seems to be difficult for me now. If I had no chocolate in my daily life, I wouldn’t feel right.

강사 첨삭

Hello there Ms. [이름] [이름]! Thank you for telling me your thought about this topic. Keep up the good work! Take care!

Aki~

Hoarding is purchase items continually.

>>> Hoarding is purchasing items continually.
Though the items were already purchased , it can’t stop to buy again.

>>> Though I already purchased an item, I can\'t stop buying them again.
I am not a hoarder.

>>> CORRECT!

OR >>> I don\'t consider myself as a hoarder.
But there is one thing that I buy continually.

>>> CORRECT!

OR >>> However, there is one thing that I continuously buy.

It is a chocolate.

>>> CORRECT

OR >>> They are the chocolates.
It help me get rid of stress.

>>> it helps me get rid of my stress.

When I angry at my daughters, I eat a chocolate immediately.

>>> When I am angry at my daughters, I eat chocolate immediately

It make me calm down.

>>> It makes me calm.

>>> It calms me down.

I think it seems a habit.

>>> It seems like a habit

>>> It became a habit.

Although I feel like change this habit, I think it seems to be difficult for me now.

>>> Although I feel like changing this habit, I think it is difficult for me now.

If I had no chocolate in my daily life, I wouldn’t feel right.

>>> CORRECT!

OR >>> If there is no chocolate at home, I wouldn\'t feel right.

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