10/1 homework

2018-10-02 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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[Zoos are sometimes seen as necessary but not poor alternatives to a natural environment. Discuss some of the arguments for and/or against keeping animals in zoos] A few weeks ago, one escaped puma was killed by people in Korea. Trainer forgot to lock the door of cage after feeding. The puma went out into the real world. The people failed to capture the puma in alive, finally, killed the puma with a dangerous reason. Unfortunately, however, it was first time to go out the cage to the puma. This was big issue, the problem of Zoo was hot potato again. I don't like Zoo. Many animals live in Zoo forever after they were born. There are so many Zoo in strike in the world. We have to solve this problem.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Thank you for doing your homework and sharing this recent event. I definitely understand how you feel. It may be beneficial and educational for children, but seeing wonderful animals in a cage is a very sad sight. They are not born to be in cages but to live free in the wild. ^ ^

-Teacher Jedah



A few weeks ago, one escaped puma was killed by people in Korea.

>>Correct
Trainer forgot to lock the door of cage after feeding.

>>The trainer forgot to lock the door of its\' cage after feeding. 
The puma went out into the real world.

>>Correct
The people failed to capture the puma in alive, finally, killed the puma with a dangerous reason.

>>The people failed to capture the puma alive. Finally, they killed the puma because it posed a threat to many. 
Unfortunately, however, it was first time to go out the cage to the puma.

>>Unfortunately, however, it was it\'s first time to go out of the cage.
This was big issue, the problem of Zoo was hot potato again.

>>This became a big issue, the problem about zoos was a hot potato again. 
I don\'t like Zoo.

>>I don\'t like zoos.
Many animals live in Zoo forever after they were born.

>>Many animals live in a zoo for the rest of their lives just right after they were born.
There are so many Zoo in strike in the world.

>>There are so many zoos in strike around the world. 
We have to solve this problem.

>>Correct

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