10/1 homework
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Hi [이름]! Thank you for doing your homework and sharing this recent event. I definitely understand how you feel. It may be beneficial and educational for children, but seeing wonderful animals in a cage is a very sad sight. They are not born to be in cages but to live free in the wild. ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
A few weeks ago, one escaped puma was killed by people in Korea.
>>Correct
Trainer forgot to lock the door of cage after feeding.
>>The trainer forgot to lock the door of its\' cage after feeding.
The puma went out into the real world.
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The people failed to capture the puma in alive, finally, killed the puma with a dangerous reason.
>>The people failed to capture the puma alive. Finally, they killed the puma because it posed a threat to many.
Unfortunately, however, it was first time to go out the cage to the puma.
>>Unfortunately, however, it was it\'s first time to go out of the cage.
This was big issue, the problem of Zoo was hot potato again.
>>This became a big issue, the problem about zoos was a hot potato again.
I don\'t like Zoo.
>>I don\'t like zoos.
Many animals live in Zoo forever after they were born.
>>Many animals live in a zoo for the rest of their lives just right after they were born.
There are so many Zoo in strike in the world.
>>There are so many zoos in strike around the world.
We have to solve this problem.
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