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I can not live without the internet.
I am exposed to the internet from 20 years old.
I had a lot of lectures in the online class and I am sitting in the chair to study and research now.
I don\'t need to go to a bank by myself because I can use a bank application service on my phone.
When I am depressed, I can refresh by myself by listening to music or movie using my phone or computer.
The internet can not give us food or water.
But, I think it gives us important things or energy equivalent to food or water.
Although I never been a someplace, it feels like I went there because there are so detailed information, pictures, and videos.
When I was a kid, many adults praise my calligraphic style.
But, a few weeks ago, I suddenly realized my calligraphic style is getting worse than before.
And I thought it caused by the internet and IT devise because I don\'t need to write something in notepad by pencil now.
It means the internet become very important to me.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Thank you for sending your homework on time. I appreciate it a lot! ^ ^
I think it\'s very common for people to say either they can not live without their cellphones or the internet. It has become sort of a part of our day to day lives. ^^
-Teacher Jedah
I can not live without the internet.
>>CORRECT
I am exposed to the internet from 20 years old.
I am exposed to the internet from 20 years old.
>>I have been exposed to the internet since I was 20 years old.
I had a lot of lectures in the online class and I am sitting in the chair to study and research now.
I had a lot of lectures in the online class and I am sitting in the chair to study and research now.
>>I get a lot of lectures online and I just sit on my chair to study and research online.
I don\'t need to go to a bank by myself because I can use a bank application service on my phone.
I don\'t need to go to a bank by myself because I can use a bank application service on my phone.
>>I don\'t need to physically go to the bank because I can use a bank application service on my phone.
When I am depressed, I can refresh by myself by listening to music or movie using my phone or computer.
When I am depressed, I can refresh by myself by listening to music or movie using my phone or computer.
>>When I am depressed, I can refresh myself by listening to music or watching a movie using my phone or computer.
The internet can not give us food or water.
The internet can not give us food or water.
>>CORRECT
But, I think it gives us important things or energy equivalent to food or water.
But, I think it gives us important things or energy equivalent to food or water.
>>CORRECT
Although I never been a someplace, it feels like I went there because there are so detailed information, pictures, and videos.
Although I never been a someplace, it feels like I went there because there are so detailed information, pictures, and videos.
>>Although I have never been to that place, it feels like I have been to that place because of some vivid information, pictures and videos we get from the internet.
When I was a kid, many adults praise my calligraphic style.
When I was a kid, many adults praise my calligraphic style.
>>CORRECT
But, a few weeks ago, I suddenly realized my calligraphic style is getting worse than before.
But, a few weeks ago, I suddenly realized my calligraphic style is getting worse than before.
>>CORRECT
And I thought it caused by the internet and IT devise because I don\'t need to write something in notepad by pencil now.
And I thought it caused by the internet and IT devise because I don\'t need to write something in notepad by pencil now.
>>And I thought it is caused by the internet and IT devise since I rarely write on a notepad these days.
It means the internet become very important to me.
It means the internet become very important to me.
>>It only shows that the internet has become very important part of my life and it means a lot to me.
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