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2014-10-13 · 첨삭 강사 Reina

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Good afternoon~! Reina~! How was your weekend? I had a good time with my family though we were a little busy on Saturaday because we went to two hospital which are located in different places. We were issued several documents for my daughter. And we went to a church on Sunday which was a new one to us but we didn't know anyone except a pastor. So after praying we had lunch and talked about with him. It is rainy and windy strongly. And I can see the rough surface of sea now in my office which is located at 23rd floors near a beach in Pusan. Can you imagine that? Sometimes the scene in my office is really good and beutiful. If I you are my friend with 'Kakaotalk', I have sent you this beutiful picture. I should come back to my duty~~ See you~ Bye~!~!

강사 첨삭

Hey [이름]! ^^

Wow! It\'s nice to read your composition! Finally!^^kkk

I had fun this weekend. Like you, I also went to a church with my friend.

The priest\'s sermon is funny and interesting because he tried to explain the homily through a story which everyone can relate to.

It\'s about loving your parents specially your mom.

I suddenly realized that it was my mom\'s birthday, October 12!^^

I called her and greeted her a happy birthday. ^^

I could imagine the scenery that you see everyday. You are so lucky!^^

I wish I could see that.

Anyway, thank you for sharing!

Keep on writing!^^

I\'ll talk to you soon,,,~

Teacher Reina *.*

Good afternoon~! Reina~!
>>> correct!^!^
How was your weekend?

>>> correct! ^^
I had a good time with my family though we were a little busy on Saturaday because we went to two hospital which are located in different places.

>>> I had a good time with my family though we were a little busy last Saturday because we went to two hospitals which are located in different places.
We were issued several documents for my daughter.

>>> correct! ^^
And we went to a church on Sunday which was a new one to us but we didn\'t know anyone except a pastor.

>>> correct!^^

So after praying we had lunch and talked about with him.
>>> So after praying we had lunch at talked with him.
It is rainy and windy strongly.

>>> It is rainy and the wind is strong.
And I can see the rough surface of sea now in my office which is located at 23rd floors near a beach in Pusan.

>>> And I can see the rough surface of the sea now in my office which is located at the 23rd floor near a beach in Pusan.
Can you imagine that?

>>>

Sometimes the scene in my office is really good and beutiful.

>>> Sometimes the scenery in my office is really good and beautiful.
If I you are my friend with \'Kakaotalk\', I have sent you this beutiful picture.
>>> If you are my friend in Kakaotalk, I must have sent you this beautiful picture.
I should come back to my duty~~

>>> I should go back to my duty.

See you~ Bye~!~!

>>> correct!^^

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