10. 10 Homework

2018-10-11 · 첨삭 강사 Blair

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Answer the question in not less than 5 sentences. Do violent images, music, and games cause people to act out violently? I think it can be. There was a murder case that a high school student killed a 8-year-old boy. She said that it was just a game. Her parents are doctors so the social status was high but she didn't go to school and she usually saw parent's anatomy book and did cruel game. I have seen cruel things but whenever I see them, I felt very uncomfortable and tried to avoid it. If people see crul things again and again, I think they can be violent.

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I think it can be. There was a murder case that a high school student killed a 8-year-old boy. She said that it was just a game. Her parents are doctors so the social status was high but she didn\'t go to school and she usually saw parent\'s anatomy book and did cruel game. I have seen cruel things but whenever I see them, I felt very uncomfortable and tried to avoid it. If people see crul things again and again, I think they can be violent.

I think it can be/ I think it is possible. There was a murder case of a high school student who killed an 8-year-old boy. She said that it was just a game. Her parents are doctors and they have a high social status but she didn\'t go to school and she usually see her parent\'s anatomy book and did the cruel act. I have seen cruel things but whenever I see them, I felt very uncomfortable so I always try to avoid it. If people see violent things over and over again, I think they can be violent because of it.

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