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2019-10-10 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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[Would you rather have a golden voice or a silver tongue?] I prefer to have a silver tongue than a golden voice. I know that logical speaking is very difficult to convince others. Although I like listening to the song with a golden voice, I think that a silver tongue is more important to live. I met the kind of person. They speak logically and I agree with them at the end of talking. My husband is also that kind of person. I am not the kind of person. My voice tone is a little high. When I was younger, I don\'t like my voice tone because I thought the undertone is attractive. However, I changed my thought that what you say is more important than what tone you say. So nowadays, I like my voice tone. I heard on Youtube that reading books enhances a speaking skill. So, I read a book every day even 20 minutes. I hope to get a silver tongue in the near future.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Thank you for sharing your thoughts on this one. I appreciate it a lot!  ^^
The power to convince people with whatever you say is a gift and not everyone has it. I\'m not sure but I guess politicians and salesmen kind of have silver tongues. It\'s so easy for them to make people believe in them and sell what they sell! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah

I prefer to have a silver tongue than a golden voice.
>>CORRECT
I know that logical speaking is very difficult to convince others.
>>I know that it is difficult to convince others just by words.
Although I like listening to the song with a golden voice, I think that a silver tongue is more important to live.
>>Although I like listening to a person with a golden voice, I think that having a silver tongue is more important.
I met the kind of person.
>>I have met that kind of person.
They speak logically and I agree with them at the end of talking.
>>They speak well and logically and they got me convinced after we were done talking.
My husband is also that kind of person.
>>CORRECT
I am not the kind of person.
>>CORRECT
My voice tone is a little high.
>>CORRECT
When I was younger, I don\'t like my voice tone because I thought the undertone is attractive.
>>CORRECT
However, I changed my thought that what you say is more important than what tone you say.
>>However, I changed my belief and I now think that what you say is more important than your tone.
So nowadays, I like my voice tone.
>>CORRECT
I heard on Youtube that reading books enhances a speaking skill.
>>I heard/watched on YouTube that reading books enhances ones speaking skill.
So, I read a book every day even 20 minutes.
>>So, I read a book every day even for only 20 minutes.
I hope to get a silver tongue in the near future.
>>CORRECT

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